Leaving
by
Joseph M. Schram
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Beginning:
I never thought you could pinpoint the day, or even the exact hour, that you fall in love with someone. It's a process, right? It takes years of knowing and fighting and seeing what someone is really like to learn to love them. You meet someone, agree to see them again, find out where they're from, where they went to school; do they cover their nose when they sneeze, what's their middle name?
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- Mannequin. writes: "I didn't like the beginning but thought it got better as it progressed; it would have been more interesting to see and hear more from Sally, and perhaps to have a bit more variation in the narrative theme and also dialogue. But it was an enjoyable read"
- Masta Dee writes: "Seurat's comment is just ignorance. I thought the story was beautiful and I really enjoyed reading it."
- Adam Morgan writes: "Really enjoyed this, too man. Keep up the good work."
- Colours writes: "This is a lovely piece of work. I must have read it 10 times already."
- Mel Finefrock writes: "Amazing, but sooo sad!! Your imagery and sensory details are outstanding, and your symbols hit home. Very well done!"
- K L Wheeler writes: "I'm not sure what Seurat(sp?) meant by his/her comment, but I thought that though the story was a bit sad, it was moving. I thought the flow and detail were terrific. What I am striving for. Thanks for a good story."
- Westy writes: "This story brought me to tears, i really cant even express why but it touched me, Im amazed at your writing ability and hope you continue to write for a long long time"
- Marsha Pitman writes: "Oh and by the way, I find Seurat's comment far less than mediocre and not at all what I call constructive criticism. Harsh, hateful judgement is what his "comment" reads to me, which inspires contempt in me."
- Marsha Pitman writes: "I enjoyed this story...somehow I could almost see the stars and the fireflies, feel the magic of the field. Well done."
- punchandjudie writes: "Such a beautiful and captivating story, I could almost feel the energy and freedom that Sally presented"